I’m glad to hear that you enjoyed reading the Snowflake. I surely have enjoyed writing it for you. To be perfectly honest, I expected more criticism. My hands did tremble slightly every time I checked the page. And yes, I have indeed mistyped the address too many times to count this week.
Roger, your words touched me deeply. I’m glad that Internet gives us this unique chance to meet and talk to interesting and strong people like you.
I will try to incorporate all your feedback into my writing and, hopefully, one day I’ll be able to get simple pleasure from knowing that somewhere out there, there are people escaping reality of everyday life and losing themselves in my stories. In the meanwhile, please read the second chapter of the Snowflake. I hope it takes you on a little journey.
Saturday 2 May 2009
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Hey, I’ll be short. Great chapter. I liked agents Kwasnewkiy (gosh, how do you spell that) and Newsak. Actually I wouldn’t mind if the rest of the book was about them two. I might even suggest a few strong words to make them more colourful, but others here might not like it . Maybe, you make a spin-off under a different name, huh? Joking! Everything’s great. Keep up the good work kiddo!
ReplyDeleteHi everyone. I just found this blog and I’m not sure what’s going on. Is this some kind of a secret society aka the Readers club? Why this blog isn’t widely advertised on other writers’ websites? In this business you need to shout to be heard. I’m sure if you spread your links, you’ll get more visitors and better discussions. I’ve read all the posts from the very beginning and though I’m not ready to give a definitive yey or ney, I can promise I’ll be coming round again.
ReplyDeleteHi Ana. Please don’t get upset but I didn’t like this chapter as much as the first one. I thought it was a bit boring.
ReplyDeleteI think you described Jason and his past very well. I already have a clear image of him in my head. I just think you should have described his visual appearance in a bit more detail.
ReplyDeleteThis chapter seems self-sufficient. Scenes with FBI agents turned out pretty good. Probably too much attention is being given to a minor hero though I can be mistaken. I consider that detailed description of characters isn’t necessary. Personally, I can’t stand a book littered with tall, dark-haired, with deep blue eyes and huge wallet, blah, blah, blah.
ReplyDeleteHi Ana. It’s my first time here. I do like the way you write, but I also preferred Chapter 1, like Lucy.
ReplyDeleteI read both chapters and was surprised how much I enjoyed them. You should definitely keep writing as you’re obviously enjoying it and your prose turns out very easy on the eye. I like the things you write about and the way you present your thoughts. I read plenty of books throughout the years and I particularly liked the fact that you are not trying to imitate a well known author, but write true to yourself. This is going to be the foundation for your success. Mark my words.
ReplyDeletePS I’ll be following your blog from now on.
I’m pleased to see that you have followed my advice. I immediately noticed an improvement in your writing. One more piece of advice, though, try not to overload the plotline with too many events. Also, don’t overwrite. Make sentences short and easy to read. And don’t rush in telling us everything in one go. Trust your readers: they’ll be patient and will listen to you to the end. Another thing, don’t forget about the feelings your reader will be left with when the story is finally over.
ReplyDeleteI cried reading about tragic death of the lawyer’s wife and their not born child. I feel his pain of this loss and his loneliness. I cannot even believe that Jason looking through a children pornography.
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